I agree, the chest return is not required. *Especially* when doing a Luke style hero. I would say that if you try to emulate Luke, it would in fact be wrong to have a chest return edge. And given your size Sarah, you made the right choice to go with the Luke look.
I'm also happy that you moved the TD clips. It looks much better now. So I think I'm happy with what I can see, and there's no problems. So you're approved!
I'll be looking forward to meeting you in Essen (this goes for all our FISD members who attend, but still).